LOUD!

In Writers’ Workshop last week, we created sentences with added clauses to describe a loud noise. Here are some of the sentences. Leave a comment to tell us which sentences you like, and why.

  1. It was so loud glass shattered
  2. It was so loud my fish tank smashed to pieces.
  3. It was so loud everyone in cross country stopped and ran to their mums, shivering.
  4. It was so loud that my crazy crabs curled up in their shells.
  5. It was so loud that all the people on the freeway went off track.
  6. It was so loud we all went under the desks.
  7. It was so loud we felt like we were shaking.
  8. It was so loud all the kids trembled to the ground.
  9. It was so loud that everyone ran out of the classroom.
  10. It was so loud everyone’s body shook.
  11. It was so loud that everybody hid under the table.
  12. It was so loud that the roof shook and everybody was shaking in fright. Their ears felt as if they weren’t hearing at all.
  13. It was so loud that the glass broke into a million pieces and tumbled to the ground.
  14. It was so loud that everybody stopped doing Daily Five and went outside to look at what it was.
  15. It was so loud that it felt like my ears were broken.
  16. It was so loud everyone hid under the tables.
  17. It was so loud the school had a blackout.
  18. It was so loud my eardrums exploded!
  19. It was so loud that everyone ran outside to see what it was.
  20. It was so loud that it felt like my ears fell off.
  21. It was so loud my cat woke from his deep sleep.
  22. It was so loud all of the babies screamed.
  23. It was so loud the whole of Adventure World shook.
  24. It was so loud pictures fell off the wall.
  25. It was so loud the lights shattered.
  26. It was so loud that a faraway iceberg sunk.
  27. It was so loud that all the leaves fell off the tree.

15 thoughts on “LOUD!

  1. I love number 16 because it would be so exciting to actually have to hide under a desk from a loud noise

    I also like number 13 because it is something I would really like to see happen for real

  2. I think it should be it was so loud that all the people on the free way went of track because I liked about it not just one person got hurt but all of them got hurt.

  3. I liked mine because I thought it was very life like, not something made up. My brother Lachlan, who is in year 4, likes number 12 and 14 because they are very descriptive.

  4. I like number 23 – because it would be fun to be at adventure world and all the water would splash on everyone.💧💦💧💦💦💦💦🙊 hehe

  5. I like number 17 cause I am not afraid of the dark and we will have to study out side our classroom in the open space cause there is no electricity and it is great to study the outdoors.

  6. I really like number 25 because it uses the word ‘shattered’ which is an interesting word to describe what happened to the lights.

  7. I like ‘it was so loud that a faraway iceberg sunk’ because It is a wild imagination and is interesting but I think he or she can improve it by making it like ‘it was so loud that all the icebergs smashed !’.

  8. My favourite was 2. It was so loud that my fish tank smashed to pieces. But really I have fish. My fish is named Harry and carmens fish is called Banana – I now it wasn’t my idea.

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