For the first one, I think was Mu I think that you did very well at the news report so it didn’t sound like a story, but I think you could improve at being pathetic like “1 crumb of chocolate was missing”.
I think these stories are very funny and interesting good job. One of the stories I when Thomas and Callum was fishing and caught a sock. That was really funny!
Mu I liked the language that you used and how it really set a scene in my head and it reminded me of a news report. I also like Jamie’ suggestion using more enthusiasm to make me even more interested.
Hey Emily I really liked your story and how it was really daggy but maybe you could and some more description at the end because it doesn’t make sense at all
Useful tips, Amber. I’m glad yoyu mentioned ‘daggy’ – this was the theme of the Creative Writing workshop wasn’t it! Emily is most welcome to write another version for a podcast.
Mu, I enjoyed the humor in your story.
something you could improve on is your expression in your voice.
Useful tip, Jamie. Maybe we could do some more podcasts to have an opportunity to improve expression.
For the first one, I think was Mu I think that you did very well at the news report so it didn’t sound like a story, but I think you could improve at being pathetic like “1 crumb of chocolate was missing”.
Great tip, Thomas!
I think these stories are very funny and interesting good job. One of the stories I when Thomas and Callum was fishing and caught a sock. That was really funny!
Sorry wrong grammar I mean`t: one of the stories I liked was when Thomas and Callum was fishing for a sock.
I agree Louis. The sock theme is great!
Mu I liked the language that you used and how it really set a scene in my head and it reminded me of a news report. I also like Jamie’ suggestion using more enthusiasm to make me even more interested.
Nice tips Scarlett. You nailed it about how a good text sets a scene in the listener’s head!
Hey Emily I really liked your story and how it was really daggy but maybe you could and some more description at the end because it doesn’t make sense at all
Useful tips, Amber. I’m glad yoyu mentioned ‘daggy’ – this was the theme of the Creative Writing workshop wasn’t it! Emily is most welcome to write another version for a podcast.