11 thoughts on “wednesday-25a070r

  • May 7, 2018 at 11:45 am
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    Mu, I enjoyed the humor in your story.
    something you could improve on is your expression in your voice.

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    • May 7, 2018 at 11:49 am
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      Useful tip, Jamie. Maybe we could do some more podcasts to have an opportunity to improve expression.

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  • May 7, 2018 at 11:46 am
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    For the first one, I think was Mu I think that you did very well at the news report so it didn’t sound like a story, but I think you could improve at being pathetic like “1 crumb of chocolate was missing”.

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  • May 7, 2018 at 11:49 am
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    I think these stories are very funny and interesting good job. One of the stories I when Thomas and Callum was fishing and caught a sock. That was really funny!

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    • May 7, 2018 at 11:50 am
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      Sorry wrong grammar I mean`t: one of the stories I liked was when Thomas and Callum was fishing for a sock.

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  • May 7, 2018 at 11:57 am
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    Mu I liked the language that you used and how it really set a scene in my head and it reminded me of a news report. I also like Jamie’ suggestion using more enthusiasm to make me even more interested.

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    • May 7, 2018 at 11:59 am
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      Nice tips Scarlett. You nailed it about how a good text sets a scene in the listener’s head!

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  • May 7, 2018 at 11:59 am
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    Hey Emily I really liked your story and how it was really daggy but maybe you could and some more description at the end because it doesn’t make sense at all

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    • May 7, 2018 at 12:01 pm
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      Useful tips, Amber. I’m glad yoyu mentioned ‘daggy’ – this was the theme of the Creative Writing workshop wasn’t it! Emily is most welcome to write another version for a podcast.

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